[Ttha-potm] 'full-up'

[Loton Cagle]

Pardon me if I interject. I happen to think the poem is just fine as originally written. Not my favorite by any means but I can’t see presuming to change a single word from the way TH wrote it. I vote for leaving it as is.

 

Best Regards,

 

Loton Cagle

 

From: carolyn mcgrath [mailto:carolynmcgrathuk at yahoo.co.uk] 
Sent: Monday, September 01, 2008 5:54 PM
To: ttha-potm at coyote.csusm.edu
Subject: [Ttha-potm] 'full-up'

 


I think TH has got a bit caught up with the alliteration: the 'grey gaunt days dividing 'and 'hopeless hills' are maybe crying out for 'full-up measures of felicity', but it does sound clumsy - it's sort of kitchen sink rather than dining table, and the rest of the poem is definitely dining table. 'Fulsome' would conote insincerity so, as the idea of completeness and fullness is more important than the alliteration, I have come up with 'brimming'. Unfortunately, I note that this apparently also means a female pig in season ready to receive the boar, so maybe that's another reason for not choosing it. The whole poem, for all its attempted elegance, makes me think of cups half empty rather than cups half full,

so I'm not that keen on it at the moment. It's still the 1st of the month - just about - so there's still plenty of time to change my mind about this POTM! 

 

best wishes 

Carolyn McGrath

 

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